The wonderful, incredibly knowledgeable,
Paul Roe is my guest
blogger for the next four weeks. She's written a fantastic series on craft techniques for writers (and it's not just aimed at romance writers!).
The Mid-Week Technique series - there are 8 posts as of Dec.2012 - are
on her blog. I'll place a list of them with the last guest post, at the end of the month, for anyone who wants to read all of them (and I highly recommend you check them out as they're gems in terms of information and examples).
Without further ado, I'll let Paula begin her post...
NINE POINTS OF TRUST - by
Paula Roe
So here we go – my first topic. I actually came across this issue as I was writing my seventh book (
A Precious Inheritance, part of Desire’s exciting
Highest Bidder
continuity), and after I handed it in, wondered if other writers had
the same issue. Mainly, the two main characters (in my case, my hero
and heroine) start off at the beginning of the story disliking and
mistrusting each other, and over the course of the book, they end up
trusting, then loving, to reach their happy-ever-after. But just how do
you practically write about that? How do you show that gradual change
of mind – in actual words on the page – that will be convincing to your
reader?
This analysis warranted going to the movies, plus my trusty index
cards, and I think I managed to pin down Nine Points of Trust. For ease
of writing, I have made the heroine the distrustful one, but this can
go both ways. Plus, for a point of reference, I’ll use one of my
favorite movies –
I, Robot (featuring the fabbo Will Smith) – as an example. So here we go.
1. MISTRUST (internal emotion)
Mistrust is formed either through direct deeds of your character or
via others’ deeds. This creates conflict within your character and
arouses strong emotions. Reasons for this mistrust can include:
- opposites from different walks of life
- he stands for something she hates (and vice versa)
- opposing goals (she wants something and he stands in her way)
- bad deeds done (e.g. he’s destroyed her father’s livelihood)
- bad family (tainted by association)
- tainted past
- different beliefs
At this stage, there can be attraction or not, and your character can
either acknowledge that or not. e .g. “Sure, he was gorgeous, but he
also represented ten years of oppression and ridicule.”
2. REITERATING MISTRUST (external/internal)
- This can happen through observation, an event or dialogue. Your
character observes, or is told/reads about events that seem to reiterate
their mistrust.
3. 1ST SEED PLANTED LEADING TO FIRST DOUBT (external/internal)
- Something happens that the character either witnesses or experiences first hand that plants the first seed of doubt
- The hero may be compared to another character in a scene, and the
other character comes off worse. For e.g. the way your hero treats
servants, waiters, colleagues and the less fortunate will say a lot
about his character. If you have a scene where your heroine can see him
interacting with others in a positive light, this will cast that shadow
of doubt. Chivalry, politeness, courtesy are all good qualities in a
hero.
- Your character knows there’s something ‘not right’, but cannot put
their finger on it. The ‘not rightness’ can be acknowledged as
attraction. The body thinks ‘attraction’, but the head can think ‘just
another reason not to trust him.’
- At this point, if your heroine’s mistrust is founded, she can walk
away from the situation with no qualms. She is not emotionally
invested.
4. OUTSIDE INFLUENCES CREATE STRONGER DOUBT (external/internal)
- Your heroine is getting a stronger impression of who your hero really is, which clashes with her beliefs
- Other people/events occur to create a stronger comparison. This can
happen via family, friends, work, exes and/or events in which they’re
thrown together
- Remember, others may also have a stake in the heroine’s mistrust of your hero, too
5. 2ND SEED PLANTED – EMPATHY AND TENTATIVE TRUST (internal/external)
- This is a coming together of goals – familiar traits/past/events are shared and a sort of ‘kindred spirit’ is formed
- The hero could inadvertently help the heroine with a problem here, or stick up for someone who is close to her
- At this stage, it would create emotional impact if her trust was misplaced now
6. OPENING OF THE MIND (internal)
- Big step forward, where the heroine must make a choice of opening her mind to the possibility that her impression is wrong
- She may take stock of past events to ensure she’s doing the right thing
7. 3RD SEED PLANTED – MAJOR EVENT (external event)
- Heroine is now committed. If mistrust is founded now, she will be emotionally affected
- She realizes the hero is not a bad guy, she may even rationalize and
think through some of the prior ‘bad deeds’ and come up with a
healthier scenario
- At this stage, she can also sway either way ==> there can be
another event where she places even more trust in the hero OR something
could happen that makes it impossible for her to reconcile the guy she’s
come to know with the guy she thought she knew. She knows in her heart
that he’s a good guy
8. BLACK MOMENT AND REVELATION ***
- Major point where all trust appears to be unfounded – it’s her worst fear realized
- This is plot driven, and goes back to your initial story question
that sets up the plot of the book – e.g. will they solve the
mystery/fall in love/find the killer?
*** Depending on your story,
Point 8 may not be needed. Why not? Well, sometimes (in short
category, especially) it could be a bit of overkill: you’ve spent all
those pages getting from distrust to trust, taking your readers on that
journey and now something happens to seemingly blow it all out of the
water. I’m not saying it
never works, but it could throw the
story prior to that point into disarray. For e.g. if the heroine can
believe the hero is still the awful person she thought at the start of
the book from one action/misunderstanding/revelation, then what was the
point of the journey?
Of course it’s up to you, the writer, to make the point
I do have one moment in book # 7 where the hero thinks the heroine
is behind something illegal but after he thinks it through, realizes
that’s a stupid thing to think. Then he consequently beats himself up
about it, believing he doesn’t deserve her if he can automatically doubt
her integrity. It’s not a chapter or a long scene, rather a few
paragraphs, but it was a logical thought for this character, so I kept
this step.
9. TRUST
- Your character is now totally convinced of the others’ integrity. This doesn’t mean they are blind to flaws
- She knows the hero is a good person – this may involve some verbal
communication, an apology or talking over their previous mistrust
- They can see behind the mask to accept them, flaws and all
At this total point of trust, it doesn’t mean that’s the end of your
story. You will also have to tie up loose ends in your plot/secondary
characters/backstory/character goals etc. But it does mean that your
characters will be working together for a common goal.
Now, on to the practical application of
I, Robot. The interesting thing here is that some points are actually grouped together and are in a different order. Lemme show you:
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| Gratuitous shirtless shot of Will Smith |
I, ROBOT
Susan Calvin is a driven scientist dedicating her entire career to
building and integrating robots into human society. She is logical,
clever and literal, and also appears to be lacking in humor.
Detective Del Spooner is a cocky charmer, hates robots and suspects
one of killing the co-founder of United States Robotics, Dr Lanning,
even though his death was deemed a suicide.
TOTAL DISTRUST
- Dr Calvin is assigned to show Spooner around the USR building to
complete his investigation. His charm and flippancy clashes with her
literal, scientific mind right away. Then Spooner suspects a USR robot
of killing Dr Lanning but Calvin is convinced the Three Laws (that
govern all robots and protect all humans) are perfect ergo, a robot
killing a human is impossible. When Spooner shoots Sonny (the robot
hiding in Dr Lanning’s office) Calvin’s mistrust is reiterated. Then
when Spooner starts shooting other robots to draw out Sonny (“they’re
just lights and clockwork”), it just cements her mistrust
- Spooner is determined to prove Sonny is the killer. Calvin is adamant a robot cannot kill and believes Spooner to be irrational
REINFORCING DISTRUST
- After a malfunction with a demolition bot at Lanning’s house,
Spooner goes to see Calvin, but she refuses to believe his ‘killer
robot’ theory, rather she says he has a ‘vendetta’. They argue and
Spooner says she likes robots because they’re cold and emotional. She
says it’s because they are safe and can’t hurt you.
SEED OF DOUBT PLANTED
- When Spooner leaves, he hands her a photo of Calvin and the Doctor
that he recovered in Dr Lanning’s house, and says “the problem is, I
care.” She chokes back tears and realizes Lanning meant something to
him, too.
OUTSIDE INFLUENCES (leads to) ==> OPENING OF THE MIND
- Calvin discovers Sonny is a completely new version of robot, one
that has no USR uplink and can override the Three Laws if he so
chooses. He is unique. He appears to have feelings and dreams, which
throws doubt on everything she believes.
2ND SEED PLANTED – EMPATHY AND TENTATIVE TRUST and 3RD SEED – MAJOR EVENT
- She hears Spooner has been in a car accident and goes to him to tell him about Sonny
- When Calvin notices Spooner’s scars he finally tells her Dr Lanning
gave him a robotic arm and lung after a horrific car accident, and also
reveals a robot saved his life but not the girl’s in the next car. The
robot had analysed the survival probability and deemed his life to be
the logical choice. Spooner says a human would have saved her, thereby
revealing his deep emotional mistrust of robots.
- Calvin and Spooner go to the lab to talk to Sonny, where more clues
are revealed. Spooner calls Sonny “someone” instead of “something”,
thereby increasing Calvin’s trust.
BETRAYAL
- When they’re both discovered in the lab, Calvin’s boss tells her
Spooner was suspended from duty, which shocks her. Then her boss plays
on her commitment and passion for robotics and convinces her Sonny must
be terminated for the good of the robotics program and USR’s
reputation. Spooner believes she’s betrayed Sonny and is not interested
in getting to the truth: “Somebody gets out of line around here and you
just kill them.”
TOTAL TRUST
- Spooner follows the clues on his own. He leaves a message on
Calvin’s phone, saying the old robots (who would have protected humans)
are being destroyed by the new ones, but her personal robot intercepts
the call. Calvin witnesses her robot’s deception and suddenly realizes
a) Spooner was right all along and b) she’s trapped in her apartment
with a possible killer robot.
- Spooner rescues Calvin. She tells him she couldn’t kill Sonny – he
is too unique – and they both sneak into USR to get to the bottom of
who’s controlling the robots
Now, I realize these points are not gospel
There could possibly be flaws and things I’ve omitted, but hey,
that’s the beauty of discovering a different writing method, right?
Love to hear your thoughts!
Author bio: Paula Roe is a
bestselling, multi-published author with over a quarter of a million
books sold world-wide. Her articles have appeared in writing journals,
blogs and hard copy and she is a frequent speaker at conferences and local
writing groups.
Before publication, Paula's writing won and placed in
various contests, including Wisconsin Romance Writers Fabulous Five Silver
Quill, Magnolia State Dixie First Chapter, Romance Writers of Australia's
Emerald Award and the Valerie Parv Award. When she's not writing, she's designing websites, conducting workshops
and tutorials, cooking or building Lego.
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